Today in English, we have been looking at the importance of proof-reading our work to check for errors and to make improvements. Below is a paragraph taken from a story. In the comments section, rewrite the paragraph with the correct spellings and punctuation. Could you add anything to make the paragraph better?
The door slammed behind Me. I was alone in the room. Or was i. The room was quite dark and there was a lot of dust in the air. It was cold too, like there was a gohst in the room I walked towards the window hoping to find that i could let some light in. I found them borded up meaning I would have to stay in the darkness. Oh no,” I muttered to myself.
The door slammed behind me, I was alone in a room, or was I? The room was quite dark and there was a lot of dust in the air. It was cold too, like there was a ghost in the room. I walked towards the window hoping to find that I could let some light in. I found them boarded up, meaning I would have to stay in the darkness. “Oh no,” I muttered to myself.
I was in the room all alone,or was I. The door slammed behind me! The room was quite dark and there was a lot of dust in the air. It was incredibly cold too, it was like there was a ghost in the room. I walked towards the window hoping to find thats some light could get in ,but I found them all boarded up so I could not see through them at all so that meant I would have to stay in the darkness “Oh no,” I whispered to myself! Then all of a sudden, the door opened wider and wider until I could see a faint shadow behind the opening door, and then the thing walked in ,it was Meg, my dog! Then I burst into happy tears.
THE END!
The door slammed behind me, I was all alone in the room, or was I? The room was dark and gloomy and there was a lot of mouldy dust in the air. It was cold, like there was a ghost in the room. I walked towards the window to see if any light was gleaming through. I found them boarded up like an abandoned house, meaning I would have to stay in the spooky darkness. “Oh no!” I screamed to myself.
The door slammed behind me! I was alone in the room. Or was I? The room was quite dark and there was a lot of dust in the air. It was cold too, like there was a ghost in the room. I walked towards the window hoping to find that I could let some light in. I found them boarded up, meaning I would have to stay in the darkness. “Oh no!”, I muttered to myself.
The door slammed behind me! I was alone in the room, or was I? The room was pitch black and there was a huge amount of dust in the steamy air. It was freezing cold too, like there was a ghost
in the room. I crept towards the window, hoping to find that I could let some light in. I found them boarded up, meaning I would have to stay in the darkness. “Oh no,” I muttered to myself…